stds-802-16: SYSREQ COMMENT:

["JUNG YEE" <jyee@newbridge.com>]

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Yee

[Submitter's First Name]
Jung

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete "a" after "...item because"

[Reason for Edit]
Grammar

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace second "Figure 1-1" with "Figure 1-2"

[Reason for Edit]
Typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Figure 1-2, replace "802.11 WLAN" with "WLAN"

[Reason for Edit]
Bluetooth and 802.11 may both meet the requirements. Leave the
description more general

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "bit error rate" with "bit error ratio"

[Reason for Edit]
To be consistent with section 10.2

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "ATM" to "ATM Forum"

[Reason for Edit]
To be consistent with IETF mentioned in the sentence

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