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stds-802-16: SUB11 Comments to Functional Requirements
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Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Broadband Wireless Access (BWA)" to "Wideband Wireless Access
(WWA)" all over the document.
[Reason for Edit]
To distinguish 802.16.3 activity from 802.16.1
Submitter's Last Name]
Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete comma after "networks"
[Reason for Edit]
Grammar
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Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Exchange the paragraph between lines 29 and 35 (starting with "A broadband
wireless access" with the next paragraph (between lines 37 and 42, starting
with "The target markets to be addressed...)
[Reason for Edit]
The definition of the markets is more important than the examples of
possible services.
Submitter's Last Name]
Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "markets" to "services"
[Reason for Edit]
The technologies provide services and are not special to markets.
Submitter's Last Name]
Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert space between "802.16.3" and "MAC"
[Reason for Edit]
Typo
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert space between "to" and "3.5"
[Reason for Edit]
Typo
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "A base" to "Base"
[Reason for Edit]
Refer to "interfaces"
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove space in "comm on"
[Reason for Edit]
Typo
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add optional Central Control Station and more base station to diagram
[Reason for Edit]
The diagram may be adequate for 802.16.1 but it is too simplistic for
802.16.3, where there is hihg influence between stations. A diagram similar
to the ETSI TM4 refernce diagram should be used.
Submitter's Last Name]
Freedman
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Avi
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "mainly" between "be" and "packet".
[Reason for Edit]
There is no reason to assume nor to limit voice services to Voice over
packets. Other mechanisms may be found to be better.
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "will be recovered" with "may be recovered"
[Reason for Edit]
See above
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "will be provided by VoIP" to "might be provided by VoIP"
[Reason for Edit]
See above.
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "DAVIC" to "DAVIC or other"
[Reason for Edit]
No reason to limit the convergence layer to DAVIC.
Submitter's Last Name]
Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
E
[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove space within "T he"
[Reason for Edit]
Typo
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Freedman
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Avi
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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
All reference should be revisitied
[Reason for Edit]
Most of the reference are not releavant to 802.16.3