stds-802-16: SUB11 COMMENT

["Leif Jansson (ERA)" <Leif.Jansson@era.ericsson.se>]

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace sentence "The BWA" through "services" with
"The BWA system shall support all services (real time and non
real time) in a packet oriented manner."

[Reason for Edit]
Clearly defined requirement that clarifies meaning of the sentence.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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34

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete lines 34 to 35

[Reason for Edit]
This is a mixture of access technologies and services.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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3

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36

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add one more competing technology: Fiber

[Reason for Edit]
To add this market segment.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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6

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29

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete lines 29 to 32

[Reason for Edit]
This text is to fluffy.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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10

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13

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
What is DAV and DAVIC ?

[Reason for Edit]
Specify. 

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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10

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22

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete "local LOS obstruction"

[Reason for Edit]
The target performance levels shall be higher.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

[Starting Page #]
11

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44

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the hole sentence "In a telephony network" through
"300 ms [15][17][75]"

[Reason for Edit]
This is not requirement on a BWA system.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

[Starting Page #]
12

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7

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
What is "transit delay"?

[Reason for Edit]
Specify.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

[Starting Page #]
15

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12

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "face" with "case".

[Reason for Edit]
Editorial.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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M11, M13, M14 and M15

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N/A

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The section numbering is wrong.

[Reason for Edit]
Editorial.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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R17

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N/A

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete R17.

[Reason for Edit]
This is not requirement on a BWA system.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Jansson

[Submitter's First Name]
Leif

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O7

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N/A

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change to mandatory.

[Reason for Edit]
This is important for a good BWA system.