[802SEC] Proposed minor edits for press release

[Geoff Thompson <thompson@ieee.org>]

Bruce-

A couple more suggested edits.

Minor, purely tidying up the grammar:

    "Enhancements are not limited to data rate, and the IEEE 802.11 
working group is addressing aspects such..."

Change the comma to either a full stop/period or a semicolon, i.e.:
    "... rate. The IEEE..."
    -OR-
    "... rate; the IEEE..."

A little more substantially:

About IEEE 802

   The IEEE 802® LAN/MAN Standards Committee develops LAN and
   metropolitan area network (MAN) standards. The most widely used
   standards are for the Ethernet family, Token Ring, Wireless LAN,
   Wireless PAN, Wireless MAN, Wireless RAN, Bridging and Virtual
   Bridged LANs. An individual working group provides the focus for
   each area. Decisions by the IEEE 802 working groups will shape
   communications for years to come. For more information about the
   IEEE 802 LAN/MAN Standards Committee, see http:// ieee.org/ 802.

I think it would be more accurate and better to say:

   The IEEE 802® LAN/MAN Standards Committee has developing
   interoperable LAN and metropolitan area network (MAN) standards for
   over 30 years.802.11 (WiFi) and 802.15 PAN (as Bluetooth).  Its most
   well-known and transformative successes have been Ethernet and
   Ethernet switching, Token Ring,
   Its work continues for the Ethernet family, Wireless LAN, Wireless
   PAN, Wireless MAN, Wireless RAN, Bridging and Virtual Bridged LANs.
   Individual working groups provides the focus for each area.
   Decisions by the IEEE 802 working groups will shape communications
   for years to come. For more information about the IEEE 802 LAN/MAN
   Standards Committee, see http:// ieee.org/ 802.

I am, of course, open to alternative opinions on the lattter.

Geoff


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