Proposed comments on ISO/IEC 10038/PDAM 2               P802.1-95/009
12 July 1995

Comment item 1 is minor technical; other items are editorial corrections.

          In order to map the Read Filtering Database Entry
       Range operation (ISO/IEC 10038, 6.7.5.4), an Entry Index
       attribute needs to be defined. Suitable additions are
       needed in table 7-21; 7.8 (page 46 lines 31-32); new
       7.8.4 with existing subclause renumbered as 7.8.5; 7.9
       (page 50 lines 3-4).

          Update references, particularly to take account of
       ISO/IEC 10038 and ISO/IEC 15802-2, both in the References
       clause and in citations in the text

          Change order of subclauses 1.2, 1.3, 1.4 to match
       order in ISO/IEC 10038

          Introduction, page 7 line 9: delete text from
       "documentation of" to end of line.

          Page 9 line 48, "wich" -> "which"

          Page 10 line 3, "documentation is" -> "documentation are"

          Page 10 lines 20-21, replace sentence by: "Tables 7-1
       through 7-4 specify how the management operations
       (defined in clause 6) correspond to LMMS service
       primitives (defined in ISO/IEC 15802-2) and managed
       object classes (defined in 7.3 through 7.9).

          Page 13 lines 5 and 6, "Datalink" -> "Data Link"

          Page 24 lines 28-29, correct capitalization and
       spacing in "Data Link Subsystem".

          Page 25 line 15, "link" -> "Data Link".

          Page 26 figure 7-1, "DATALINK" -> DATA  LINK".

          Page 34 line 44, "acSetPortState" -> "acForcePortState".

          Page 45 line 28, insert "GROUP ELEMENTS" before
       "aNumberOfDynamicEntries" and comma after.

          Page 47 line 16, insert additional reference
       "6.7.5.3.2 (2), ".

          Page 49 lines 22-31, delete "Arc" from each Object
       Identifier definition, for consistency with the preferred
       convention as per annex C.

          Page 51, delete the instructions to insert the
       copyright-release footnote for annex A (already present
       in ISO/IEC 10038).

          Page 52 line 17, "shosw" -> "shows".

          Page 53 line 12, "(o)" -> "(0)"

          Page 54 line 12, "Datalink" -> "Data Link ".