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[STDS-802-11] NesCom comments received on the P802.11bp PAR



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Hello Bo and all,

To date, four NesCom comments have been received. Please see the comments and my suggested changes below.

Thanks,

Dorothy
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Comment 1 - 5.2.b and 8.1
" The first paragraph in 8.1 seems a part of the scope definition, i.e., belonging to 5.2.b. Suggest moving it to 5.2.b."
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Comment 2 - 5.2.b
May I suggest using "This amendment defines ...", instead of "... shall define ..."?
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Comment 3 - 5.2.b
" You are kindly asked to consider rephrasing the last sentence of 5.2 as follows:

"This amendment defines mechanisms for coexistence of an AMP STA and deployed STAs compliant with IEEE Std 802.11™-2020 that operate in the same radio frequency band as the AMP STA."

Reason: A "shall" statement provides an instruction. However, 12.2.3 of <https://mentor.ieee.org/myproject/Public/mytools/draft/styleman.pdf> states that "The scope of the standard shall explain in statements of fact what is covered in the standard and, if necessary, what is not covered in the standard […]." Hence, a standard's/amendment's scope describes what is and not what shall be."
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DS Response to comments 1,2,3:
Modify the text in 5.2.b to be as follows, and remove the related text in 8.1.
"This amendment defines modifications to both the IEEE 802.11 Medium Access Control layer (MAC) and Physical Layers (PHY) to enable operation of an Ambient Power communication (AMP) station (STA) that is powered using energy harvesting.

Operation in sub-1 Gigahertz (GHz) and 2.4 GHz is defined. Specifically, at least one mode of data communication in sub-1 GHz band is defined and at least one mode of data communication in 2.4 GHz band with the AMP communication access category (AC) being set to AC_BK (background) is defined.

This amendment defines mechanisms for coexistence of an AMP STA and deployed STAs compliant with IEEE Std 802.11™-2020 that operate in the same radio frequency band as the AMP STA. "

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Comment 4- 5.4
In Sec. 5.4, the second paragraph seems to apply to the Amendment for AMP, and seems to be missing a noun, such as "operations" after "requirements to maintenance-free, ....".

Consider adding "operations" and changing "requirements to" to "requirements for", such as:

"However, there are still many use cases and applications that cannot be addressed using existing IEEE 802.11 based WLAN IoT technologies due to requirements for maintenance-free operation, ultra-low complexity, very small size, very long lifecycle, and the limitations of conventional batteries."

DS response: Accept the change.
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