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Colleagues: I’ve done a review of the PARs from other WG for the November plenary. This meeting is pretty light on the number of submissions to review. The two 802.11 PAR modifications seem to me to be quite clean. The 802.15.10a amendment PAR and CSD comments I have are mostly addressing minor things that some might consider picking at nits. The 802.1CBcv July comments have been addressed and I have no new comments. Comments from my review follow. —Bob IEEE P802.15.10a Recommended Practice for Routing Packets in IEEE
802.15.4 Dynamically Changing Wireless Networks: Additional routing modes PAR: <https://mentor.ieee.org/802.15/dcn/17/15-17-0565-00-0000-802-15-10a-par.pdf> 2.1, Title Comment: PAR does not
appear to be output from myProject because of formatting of: Amendment adding
additional routing modes, plus amendment title should start with a capital letter. Proposed remedy: Amendment:
Adding additional routing modes (the
colon should be fixed by myProject, capitalization should be corrected when
entered into myProject). 5.2.b, Project scope Comment: NesCom conventions
require expansion of acronyms. Proposed remedy: Expand E2E
and P2P in this PAR item. 6.2.b, Registration activity Comment: 5.2.b of the PAR
describes the scope as including “completely define addressing”. The use of EUIs for addressing is
registration activity. Either the scope
is imprecisely stated (e.g., the addressing mentioned is not 802-style MAC
addresses contrary to the response to CSD 1.1.2.b); or there is registration
activity expected in the amendment, use of MAC addresses. Proposed remedy: If answer
remains no, explain why the RAC should not need to do a mandatory coorrdination
review. If answer is changed to yes,
explain the scope of registration activity, possibly indicating that the use of
EUIs is not changed from previously reviewed material. CSD: <https://mentor.ieee.org/802.15/dcn/17/15-17-0566-00-0000-802-15-10a-csd.docx> Titl Comment: The amendment
title on the CSD does not agree with the title on the PAR Proposed remedy: Reconcile
the two. ________ IEEE P802.11ax High Efficiency WLAN
CSD: <https://mentor.ieee.org/802.11/dcn/14/11-14-0169-01-0hew-ieee-802-11-hew-sg-proposed-csd.docx> No comments. ________
IEEE P802.11az Enhancements for Positioning PAR modification request: <https://mentor.ieee.org/802.11/dcn/17/11-17-1319-01-00az-p802-11az-par-modification.pdf> CSD: <https://mentor.ieee.org/802.11/dcn/17/11-17-1318-00-00az-ieee-802-11az-ngp-csd-update.docx> No comments. ________ IEEE P802.1CBcv Information Model, YANG Data Model and Management Information Base Module (PAR submitted for July, but consideration was deferred and PAR and CSD were subsequently revised) PAR: <http://ieee802.org/1/files/public/docs2017/cv-draft-PAR-0917-v02.pdf> CSD: <http://ieee802.org/1/files/public/docs2017/cv-draft-CSD-0917-v01.pdf> No comments, I believe July PAR and CSD comments have been addressed in the revisions. |