George,
I know I'm late, but here is my input so far:
a) 1.6 Scope -- The draft wording needs polishing.
Currently: "The scope of the Standards Committee is to develop and maintain networking standards, recommended practices and guides for local, metropolitan, and other area networks, and associated technologies, using an open and accredited process, and to advocate them on a global basis."
I suggest: "The scope of the Standards Committee is to provide oversight for the development and maintenance of local, metropolitan, and other area network standards, recommended practices and guides, and associated technologies, using an open and accredited process, and to advocate for them on a global basis."
Rationale: IEEE 802 LMSC does not develop technologies. Advocation shouldn't be in the Scope -- it's an ancillary support function.
b) 2. Responsibilities
Currently: "The Standards Committee is responsible for the development and coordination of one or more standards projects including their maintenance after their approval as standards by the IEEE SASB."
I suggest: "The Standards Committee is responsible for oversight over the development and coordination of one or more standards projects including their maintenance after their approval as standards by the IEEE SASB.
c) 2.2 Dominance/3. Officers
Formating errors -- "
Currently: "3. The votes of individuals in the dominating party are treated as a single vote for
the purpose of that activity. Officers"
This should be split -- "The votes of individuals in the dominating party are treated as a single vote for
the purpose of that activity" belongs to the previous line.
3. Officers should be a header
d) 1. Introduction
Change "by IEEE Computer Society Standards Activities Board (SAB)" to "by IEEE Computer Society Standards Activities Board (CSAB)" and update every occurrence of SAB with CSAB.
That's it for now. Happy Independence Day!
Regards,
--Paul